Just as the yellow dawn creeps through
the curtains, thoughts roam freely
before being locked away once again
in secret chambers of self
-M. Taggart
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Just as the yellow dawn creeps through
the curtains, thoughts roam freely
before being locked away once again
in secret chambers of self
-M. Taggart
Sent from my iPhone
mtaggartwriter 
I know I’ve said it before but I love the way that you express yourself Matt 😊 x
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Thank you 🙂 you are very kind
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Honest 😉
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Oh yeah. It always seems the way.
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Good use of enjambment in this poem:
https://literarydevices.net/enjambment/
I like the noun, yellow dawn. My only suggestion is because the poem is so short–I would give it a unique title that isn’t repeated in the poem.
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What would you title it?
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I think only the author can answer that question! I know that many poets do use the device that you did in having the title repeated in line one, but I’ve always been averse to it. With a short poem, every word has even more power, so I would have a unique title. Just my viewpoint though. It’s still a great poem, as is.
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It’s refreshing.
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Cheers
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Well expressed, Matt, how we are such internal creatures.
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