This is simple yet elegant… i love this 🙂
Your writing may be better than my work! hope you dont mind checking it out and letting me know what you think maybe? 🙂 https://sangg527.wordpress.com/
But this is great – i wonder rhythmwise if you remove the word ‘free’ what you think? Cos when you say it out the last line has that one extra beat – wordwise it is great but i also love the ‘understood’ nature of if it was just ‘we have this day to be’ while keeping free in the title… just a thought that came to me as i read it but i love the first two lines in particular – that sense of holding someone back from a potential tragedy
mtaggartwriter 
Very good keep writing
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I appreciate that. Thank you.
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Your welcome
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This is simple yet elegant… i love this 🙂
Your writing may be better than my work! hope you dont mind checking it out and letting me know what you think maybe? 🙂 https://sangg527.wordpress.com/
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Thank you. Cheers.
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There’s so much here
in 4 lines
Great piece
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I’m glad you like this one Sheldon. Cheers my friend.
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So short and simple and profound – reminds me i need to get back to my Micropoetry writing that i started this year – https://brettfish.wordpress.com/2015/07/14/micropoetry-2015
But this is great – i wonder rhythmwise if you remove the word ‘free’ what you think? Cos when you say it out the last line has that one extra beat – wordwise it is great but i also love the ‘understood’ nature of if it was just ‘we have this day to be’ while keeping free in the title… just a thought that came to me as i read it but i love the first two lines in particular – that sense of holding someone back from a potential tragedy
Nice one
love brett fish
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I like that. I feel like writing it again and having both side by side forever. Thank you for the in depth feedback. Good morning and Cheers.
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Cute and short! Like it!
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Reblogged this on mtaggartwriter and commented:
Free To Be – A Poem
Originally written on July 23, 2015.
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