‘Now he would never write the things that he had saved to write until he knew enough to write them well. Well, he would not have to fail at trying to write them either. Maybe you could never write them, and that was why you put them off and delayed the starting.’ -Hemingway, ‘The Snow Of Kilimanjaro’
A brilliant short story written by my favorite author. Notice his use of words and non commas when many would argue a comma was needed. I would debate that the commas not used were by design and the flow of the sentence as Hemingway saw it in his mind is much more important than where a comma ought to have been placed. The first line is a good example of what I’m typing about. Imagine a comma after ‘Now’ the entire sentence would stall. In my opinion he wanted the reader to keep pace, or to speed up.
And further, what Hemingway is writing about is truth. All of us writing currently, or whom have stopped writing, know exactly what Hemingway is talking about. For Hemingway to sum it up in one fucking sentence is why I honor the man. There is only one Hemingway and there can never be another.
I appreciate any and all of you who have continued to read my work.
Read on. It’s good for the brain.
Oh- certainly we saw you
hunched shoulders, laboring, tears streaming
We raged through the streets
demanding your sacrifice
So much so that you became lost
It’s been too long now
your metamorphosis of thought,
beautifully etched into the frame of a wooden windowsill
is waiting to be read
your tears stained History-
what have we done
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We took a broken thought and turned it to gold. Why. The boy, with his head held under a towel telling. His head held by another. If one fixes another breaks. We shouldn’t be writing this, we’re looking now. Keep going. No. The towel sickens and breaths. We hold you down. Don’t you see.
I wanted to write today. About a picture of a dock engulfed in fog.
The fog was thick.
How’s that. fuckers.
My drink is nice. It’s a mixture of ice and booze.
The booze being Gin. Which isn’t my first choice.
it’s what I had
The dock photo isn’t a great photo
I want to give it away
Outside my window there are trees
Beyond those trees, a rich man lives
he built a house for his son
Today there was a violent fight
between a young man and young woman
i think she won
now though the fan is cooling the air
and I’m enjoying my drink
Please, use this photo. However you’d like. I took it. It’s OK, but not great.
To frame the face with a sickened clog-
Our throats pinch bile
At the bottom of the clock Lurked the mouth who spoke too much. the boy watched unwillingly, while the angle of time twitched for more. And there he stood. alone. Waiting for the top of the clock. -The brook wasn’t too deep. Not really. when he stepped in it was nice and cool around his ankles.
Let’s walk through the woods
where our hidden shadow
can speak with trees
At one point we’ll all reach down and pick something up again.
When men were men-
their fists were large.
Mouths stood shut-
Memories of family meant something,
a ring meant something.
I wrote this originally as follows on FB:
‘When men were men their fists were large. Mouths stood shut. Memories of family meant something. And a ring meant something.’
Megan liked it. I asked her why. I enjoyed her answer. So, now I share it here. Cheers.
The toilet needs to be cleaned. Try one more time. Behind the seat. The odor sets in. The boy wipes his nose with dirty hands. He wonders when he’ll be able to go outside. Flogged thinking takes place of truth. The boy scrubs and views his life without reason. Thank you, he thinks, the outside isn’t much anyway.